Introduction to Me:)
This is me.... (Image Information: personal photo of me; photo from August 2020.) My name is Carlee and I am in my Senior year!! (Super exciting, scary and sad all at the same time) The past three years have flown by and I have no doubt that this one will be the same. Hopefully, it doesn't go too fast, as I am still in the process of figuring out what my life will look like after graduating. I had always been the student in college that took as many classes as possible to try and graduate early until I realized that there was no fun in that. Now I am trying to enjoy my last year, take it as it comes and live in the moment. Unrelated to school, I enjoy doing a lot of different random things. Thanks to quarantine, I have gone from a place where I could be featured on America's Worst Chefs to an advanced novice (those two words don't really belong together but you get the point) in all things sushi and tacos. I also have a great appreciation for reading and even get made f
Hi Carly!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your Looney Tunes tale of "Jumping the River"! It reminded me of watching morning cartoons as a kid! At the end when the Tasmanian Devil is defeated, You mentioned that he stormed away to go back home and sulk. Did you consider adding in the tornado spin effect as he storms away? I think it would really tie it all together! Also, I noticed a few grammar errors: 1.) "One day Bugs Bunny and all the crew down to the river to enjoy a nice day playing in the water and picnicing on the bank" I think you you meant to add the word "went" in between "crew" and "down", also I think that correct spelling is "picnicking"(but I may be wrong) . 2.) Bugs Bunny was still quiet because he was nervous that the Tasmanian Devil might be right and he did not want to be embarrass himself by failing and falling in" You would just have to remove the word "be" to correct this sentence. Overall this was a very fun story to read!
Hi Carlee,
ReplyDeleteI thought your Looney Tunes tale "Jumping the river" was very clever, and definitely kept me on the edge of my seat the entire time. I didn't know if he was going to make it over the river or not, so you made it interesting by adding detail as well. I like how you used the Tasmanian Devil as the antagonist, while Bugs Bunny was the protagonist. I think one thing you could maybe add to your story is more details on where the river was located, how deep it was, and why Bugs Bunny is always picked on. I also really liked the image you chose. It represents the Tasmanian Devil perfectly in your story. Overall, I think you did a great job, and think you can add even more detail to make it better.
Hi Carlee!
ReplyDeleteI really like the creativity you are using with your storybook! I love the the of the Looney Tunes! I definitely never would have thought of that myself. It makes your stories really fun to read. I really like how much detail and description you used in your first story. I was definitely captivated the entire time. I really like how you were able to keep the true characteristics of the actual Looney Tunes characters while still writing your own unique stories. So far, your storybook is coming together really well and ultimately I think that you will end up with such a fun and cute project! I hope you are able to keep this theme going strong! Good luck and good job!
Hey Carlee. Whenever I saw the word looney in the title, I was hoping that it would involve the looney toons characters. I always like it when people take characters from our childhood and recreate a story using them. I think it makes it a little bit easier to follow. I like how you even related the actual characters personalities to the ones from the Ramayana. Taz is always causing trouble and this story is no different. Of course, in the end, Bugs Bunny was the one who made it across the river. Just like he would be the one as if it was the actual cartoon show. Also, the imagery and layout of your website is really good. It definitely gives off that cartoon and looney toons vibe that is goofy and happy. It would be cool to see each story be different but still follow a story line, kind of like the cartoon show.
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ReplyDeleteI grew up watching Looney Tunes, so I got really excited the second I saw the banner image on your website! I immediately noticed a childlike quality to your writing that I absolutely love. I don’t know if it was intentional or not, but I think it would be really beneficial to your storybook if you kept that up for your other stories. I say this because Looney Tunes is a show geared towards kids, so by you making these characters speak and act in a childlike manner, it ties the show and your story together in a nuanced yet subtle way. I also think your character choices were very fitting to their counterpart Ramayana characters. You did not make any changes or adjustments to any of the characters’ base personalities, and yet it still maintains similarities to the Ramayana tales you referenced. Will you consider including an introduction page? When I was reading the first few sentences of “Jumping the River”, I couldn’t figure out whether this was inspired by the Ramayana or if it was your take on a Jataka Tale, so I think establishing and clarifying what your inspiration is in an introduction would be helpful. I also say this because I know this story is inspired by The Ramayana, but will your other stories follow suit or will you take inspiration from multiple Indian epics? I think your story is very strong and well-written, so I look forward to reading the rest of your storybook!
Hi Carlee!
ReplyDeleteGrowing up I definitely knew what Looney Tunes was, but I never really found myself super drawn to it, on the contrary though I think this is a great and innovative way to write about classic Indian Epics. I really like how colorful and bright the cover of your website is and it gives a good layout of some of the character that we should be expecting. This twist on the tiny tales of Ramayana was definitely clever and kept wanting to read more! I like how to Protagonist was Bugs Bunny and the antagonist was Tasmanian Devil, but a question that I had while reading was why does the Tasmanian Devil specifically only pick on Bugs Bunny and none of the other characters. I don't know if that was intentional but it was definitely a question that I was curious about. Overall, great story and keep up the good writing.
Hi Carlee!
ReplyDeleteI love your storybook idea! I grew up watching Looney Toons with my Dad, so I was really excited to see this. Jumping the River was fun to read, and I thought you did a fantastic job tying it all together with Looney Toons and stories from Ramayana. I love the layout of your site as well, it really takes me back to being a kid. I look forward to reading the rest of your stories! Great job!
Hi Carlee! Your storybook is so cute and I love the pictures you've chosen! It's super appealing and I love the layout of it! Your story "Jumping the River" was great and super clever! You really captured the Looney Tunes vibe and noted all of the character's mannerisms very well. I could picture everything you were saying and that's the best part about reading a story! Super good job and can't wait to see your other stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Carlee! Your storybook is adorable and I love all of the Looney Toons characters. I have not really watched a lot of Looney Tunes, but I think the characters are really nice. I think in the first sentence of your first story, you forgot a word. I believe it should say "...all of the crew went down to the river..." I also think that you said "hid" instead of hide in the third paragraph. I really enjoyed how you laid out the dialogue, as it was really easy to read and made the story more life like. Overall, your story is adorable and is very coherent. You captured the personalities of all the Looney Tunes characters perfectly! I read "The Ramayana" book version instead of the Tiny Tales version, and it is pretty close to being the same. You did a great adaptation of the story and I cannot wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteHi Carlee! I love your story and the way you used loony toons characters! I like how your writing really reflects the characters original characteristics and qualities throughout the story of "Jumping the River". I liked how the story was light hearted like you had planned and it was an easier read for myself than the original story. I definitely related when you mentioned getting distracted by the names in the Ramayana! One of my favorite parts is that you included the loony crew and was able to keep them active just as I could imagine in an episode. The style reminded me of how jatakas read and originally made me think it was based off of one. I liked the way your site is set up as well and the story overall. I am also very excited to see what stories you decide to make into loony toons next.
ReplyDeleteHi Carlee I read your story and I really enjoyed it. I thought that your story did an excellent job of keeping the reader engaged and it was extremely fun to read. I loved the way your site is formatted. The images you picked are very playful and fun. You did an amazing job allowing the reader to to understand what each character is thinking. I love the tone that you wrote in throughout. I love how you made your story relatable to what people are familiar with since childhood which I think this is a big reason why your story was interesting. You took a serious topic but made it more laid back and playful without taking away the importance of the topic. The way you have everything formatted looks great and I don’t think I see anything to improve on. Overall great job, I really enjoyed reading the story!
ReplyDeleteHello Carlee. I just read your story and I thought it was creative and fun. First off, I think you did a really good job including little details that made the story impactful. For example, the way you have Tweety call the Tasmanian Devil "Tathz" was a really good detail. Also the way you describe the characters was really accurate as well. For example, I liked how you had Daffy Duck act overconfident and prideful, thus keeping true to his character. I do wonder why the Tasmanian Devil decided to try and defeat Bugs Bunny by using a challenge that involved jumping since rabbits are good at jumping. Although maybe the Tasmanian Devil wanted to really embarrass Bugs Bunny by showing everyone that he could not even jump well. Overall I think you did a really good job telling a story that is true to Looney Tunes and the source story.
ReplyDeleteHi Carlee. I enjoyed reading your stories! While I did not really watch Looney Tunes as a child, I know enough about the characters to appreciate how you incorporated them into different parts of the Ramayana. It was very entertaining to see how you adapted scenes from the Ramayana into the world of a typical cartoon. One suggestion I could make would be to move up the second image you put in for the "Gossip by the Pool" story. I did not scroll past the Author's Note the first time I was on the page, so I did not actually see the image at first. Maybe you could put it in the same spot you put the one of the Tazmanian Devil on the first story? Having the text box be not as wide would also make it easier to read, I think. Beyond those suggestions, I enjoyed your two stories and I am looking forward to your third! Good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Carlee! I thought it was extremely cute to recast the characters from the Ramayana and the Mahabharata as the Looney Tunes. It made everything just a little bit more light-hearted, as well as a lot of fun to read; the section with Tweety-speak made me chuckle a lot. One of the things I was thinking was that it would be cool to have a picture of a character next to several (or even each) of the paragraphs, although I don't know how practical that would be to do with Google Sites. I'm just imagining a tiny Tweety hovering next to that quote and laughing to myself.
ReplyDeleteI definitely agree about the gossip. I really didn't care much for that section in the original material, especially the way it ended, so it was great to see an alternative written out. It would be awesome if you could find a bigger version of that image and use it as a banner for the story instead - it's a bit hard to see tucked away below the author's note.
I don't know if this is just because it's not finished, but the link for The Snake & Ferret doesn't work for me, just goes to a blank page. If you're in the process of editing, disregard this of course.
Anyway, fantastic job.
Hi Carlee,
ReplyDeleteThe last time I visited your page you only had one story up, it is so cool to see how it is all coming together now! It is still so cute and so fun to read with the Looney Tunes characters. I really liked your "Gossip by the Poo"l story. Your interpretation of it was so much for fun and entertaining to read. I felt like I was reading a cute little children's story. I love how it ends on such a happy positive note. I was a little bit more confused by your story, "The Snake and the Ferret." It was well written, however it did not seem to include any Looney Tunes characters. I thought that you would use those characters in all of your stories, as this seemed to be your theme. I think it would be cool if you could find a way to incorporate the characters into this story.
Hey Carlee!
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of incorporating the Looney Tunes characters into the Ramayana universe! As you said, it gives to the epics a lighthearted essence. I also believe it is easy to read since the characters are the ones from our childhood. As I was reading your third story, I notice that there are no Looney Tunes characters. I think you should explain in your author’s note why you did not write with these characters since your website is based on the Looney Tunes universe.
The focus for this week deals with the images. I think you choose your images correctly and it’s relevant to your website topic! One thing I can suggest is to check your hyperlink for your image credit on your second story page because it does not lead you to the website. Overall, your website was clear and easy to navigate.
Thanks for your stories and have a good day!
Carlee! I really like how nostalgic your project is. Not that the stories themselves are necessarily nostalgic, but the characters you are using to act these stories out certainly are! In the first story, I like how you chose which Looney Toon would be what character. I also really like how you typed the dialogue in the way the Looney Toons talk canonically. The second story gave off a very different energy than the first one did. Maybe it felt more serious than the last. I really enjoy the amount of dialogue you use, I think it is an efficient way to get length to a story. Your Author's Notes are very useful and well done, I appreciate them very much. I think that your project is going very well so far! I hope the creative juices continue to flow for you!
ReplyDeleteHello Carlee. I finished reading your second story and I thought that it was really good. I think that it is really fitting that you started your story with the weather warming up. I also like how you changed the original story so that Porky's friends did not believe the rumors. This is because the main thing I did not like about the Ramayana was how Rama sent Sita into exile even after she had been faithful to him the entire time. So it was nice to see that your story ended with a good ending. I also like how you stayed true to the the Looney Toons characters especially in the dialogue. For example, you stayed consistent to the way that Daffy, Tweety, and Porky talk. I think it was also funny how Daffy was the one to fall for the rumor since he is normally very gullible. Overall a great story.
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ReplyDeleteThe first thing I noticed was the cute cartoonic Looney Toons of your pages.I loved the images you used and they really made me happy as well as stood out. This is good because it means you were able to attract attention to your page and make the reader curious and excited to read your story .I think the author's note you provided was really beneficial and explained/broke down your storyline well. I was personally really enraged and upset at the way Rama treated Sita even after how faithful she was to him. So It made me really happy that the rumors were ignored and a happy ending was made possible. I love that you made your page relatable to the audience because I was really excited to see my childhood cartoons a part of the story. I would focus on tenses and verbs for example in the second story I noticed you switch up what tense you are speaking in, but I think besides these minor mistakes you did a really good job!
Hi Carlee!
ReplyDeleteI loved reading the stories at your portfolio! I grew up watching Looney Tunes, so it was fun to see the characters in new adventures inspired by the Ramayana. I thought you did a very good of writing in all three of your stories. They were easy to follow and included enough dialogue and twists to keep me engaged. I especially liked how you kept Taz as an antagonistic character (but he is my favorite). I will say that I liked the handful of times you used dialect to mimic the characters’ speech patterns, and I noticed especially in “Gossip by the Pool” there were times where you left those articulations out, so you might want to go through and make sure you’ve added that consistently throughout the stories. Are you going to revise your third story to be Looney Tunes themed? If you have time, I think that would be a nice touch to tie your stories together. Otherwise, the third story is a bit out of place even though it’s very good. I hope you’re doing well as you finish the semester. Good work!